My daughter’s 7th grade classroom has an amazing teacher who is enthusiastic about writing and the writing process. After hearing how they are learning about “Showing, not telling,” I recently offered to do a classroom visit to reinforce the concept they are learning.
As an author and editor I was thrilled to hear how the teacher is sharing with them about the real writing process and what matters to editors. When we show instead of tell in our writing, we make the writing jump off the page.
I asked the children for examples of showing for the sentence “He liked this safe place.” My favorite response? “His eyes lit up when he walked in”. Amazing – and from a 7th grader. I suspect us writers are going to have some strong competition in a few years.
Some more examples of showing versus telling:
- Telling: It was a nice day.
- Showing: The sun gleamed through the bright blue sky. The warm breeze tickled my cheek
- Telling: He was sad.
- Showing: A frown crept across his face as a tear escaped from his eye.
- Telling: My room is a mess.
- Showing: Clothes lay strewn all over the room. Checkers decorated the remaining visible floor.
Join in the conversation. What are your Showing Versus Telling sentences?
Thank you for the \”shout out\” here on your blog! And thank you for sharing your craft with the students! They will need all your inspiration for when we tackle poetry after the break!
Great examples, Jen!
Good stuff. Nice examples. Thanks for sharing.
Good stuff. Nice example sentences. Thanks for sharing.
How nice to visit your child's classroom in this manner. Great modeling for the kids, not to mention your daughter!Loved the examples, too…